Slade feedback thread

Now that I got three rps up, i'd like to get someone's feedback on them so I can gauge how i'm doing so far. In the three i've posted, i tried to give a sample of what i plan to do with the rps, where there will be different parts told by different characters whether it's Slade, Evelyn, Michael who will be introduced later, Sinclair, or other parts thrown in later in the story arc. Really what i hope to get from you guys is whether the story itself is interesting, what you think of the characters introduced so far, whether the style works, both in the story and in the hype-promo at the end, whether the separation between Slade and Pariah is a good idea or not, and general feel of the rps as a whole. any constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated. thanks

here are the links to the three rps:
https://insurgencywrestling.forumotion.com/t4515-the-mysterious-mr-sinclair
https://insurgencywrestling.forumotion.com/t4530-pariah-vs-the-broom
https://insurgencywrestling.forumotion.com/t4566-jay-hot-stuff-vs-pariah

again I appreciate the feedback